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facetofcathy ([personal profile] facetofcathy) wrote in [community profile] facetsoftext2012-06-30 09:47 am

SPN J2 Big Bang 2012 Part III

Two Gen stories today with a similar theme--Dean arrested by the FBI. One is set during the missing year where Sam was in hell, and the other is set after Jus in Bello and Sam is right there, but no one knows it but Dean.

The first one is from the SPN Crossover Big Bang that is timed to coincide with the main Big Bang. SPN fandom has scheduling issues. Well, and issues.

The Truth Lies Beneath by [livejournal.com profile] mangacat201

Gen - R - 15,240 words - Crossover Big Bang - Fandom: Lie to Me

Author's Warnings/Spoilers: Supernatural missing year AU, set right after Swan Song, Lie to Me canon. Minor violence

Author's Summary:
Dean Winchester is one of the most notorious criminals that ever graced the FBI’s most wanted list. Now he’s back from the dead (again) and in custody, facing trial for his pretty exceptional list of crimes. It’s up to the experts of the prestigious Lightman Group to unravel the mystery and find out whether Dean is criminally insane or a stone-cold psychopath. Or something else entirely…

I've not seen Lie to Me beyond some commercials for it. It appears to be the standard genius man wrangled by a hyper-competent but still subordinate woman case of the week show that is now ubiquitous on cable. I had no trouble following the story without knowing anything about the show.

This story was interesting enough to read to the end, but it's not perfect by any means. It's primarily a character study of Dean and the main character from Lie to Me who have a battle of wits in an FBI interview room.

The main weakness of the story is the Dean voice. Usually I'm complaining that the authors buy into the superficial affect Dean presents on TV and write him as too much of doofus dudebro. In this case, he's a bit too articulate in a lot of the dialogue. That's a shame too, because this is a really good character study of Dean otherwise.

The whole point of this kind of story is what happens when the truth of Dean's life is set in opposition to what the mundane police will make of his criminal history. It's a trope the show's used a few times, often for cheap laughs, and here the mundanes get an education in a hurry.

Unfortunately the story just ends (with a plot device right out of canon).

Not sorry I read it, but it's technically only a story idea, not a story.

Monster by [livejournal.com profile] foolsdance

Gen - PG13 - 23,600 words

Author's Warnings: Explict threats of violence to a child, show levels mention of violence, profanity

Author's Summary:
Following the disastrous events in Colorado, Sam and Dean encounter a new problem. An unknown creature changes Sam into his twelve year old self. Going from bad to worse, they are caught by the FBI, who believe Sam has been kidnapped by Dean as a replacement for his missing brother. It's up to Sam to break Dean out of custody, not easy when you're suddenly a pint sized foster kid.

Set right after Jus in Bello (I had to look it up; I hate in when fans assume we've all got the show memorized by where each episode took place.), and it treads the same ground as the that episode, where Dean is assumed to be a serial killer, except everyone thinks Sam is a child he kidnapped.

The story is a little awkwardly written to begin with, it'd work better if it just cut to the chase, literally, and began with the arrest.

The thing that struck me during the arrest and early interrogation scenes is how similar Dean the assumed criminal and Sam the assumed victim are treated. There's a parallel shown between Dean's cavity search at the jail and Sam's medical exam, but the author doesn't make anything of this, and the fact that Sam as a child has no more right to consent to what's done to him than Dean does is actually the most interesting thing going on, but it is just an assumption. That's the way it is.

That aside, this is a very good story, with some good OCs, and I enjoyed it a lot. I would have enjoyed more of Sam's POV, but what is there is good.

There's a few buts though.

The setting is New Orleans, and some of the OCs are Cajun, which is a bit heavily done. Also, every black person is pointed out in some way, but the white people are not. This is something a lot of authors do, and here we even get the cringe inducing flash of white teeth against dark skin. Urk. This is clumsy, rather than ill-intentioned. I think this author can do much, much better than this.

Also there's apostrophe issues all through the story as well as some other grammar mistakes. Minor, other than the apostrophe thing, but noticeable. (Since I work really hard to correct apostrophe errors in my own writing, which I do all the time, it bugs me a lot.)

Still, good story, worth a read.